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HydroChronic

Eyes as colorful
As the timeless blue skies
Face is like a colorful rainbow
After all the clouds go away
And create that beautiful display
Now sitting on the beach
I look into your eyes
We make a connection
As you smile and glance
Over at the ocean and
See your gorgious reflection
Standing on an island
I kiss your smooth soft lips
And let go as i stare
At the purple horizon
Laying side by side
On the rooftop
Counting the stars
In the sky
As we fall back into
The depths of time
..........let me know what you think...

 

Meursault

Try to avoid clichés. The use of the sunny beach environment with rainbows and cloud parting to describe the beauty of a woman and relationships is overdone. Try making it more personal, with actual details about this wonderful girl so that it has something unique that no one else could think of.

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