Poem 'Swift End'

nixa · 11-26-2008, 05:38 PM

I'm pretty awful at writing poetry so sorry in advance @_@;

Swift End

One, two, only three
There's not much more
This body can take
Swallowed
Too late
It will sink in quick
Death calls
Head blurry
Stomach sick
Knees fall
Time slows
Thought speeds
Pain increased
Death in a seed
To be deceased
No more chances
No more light
Lost romances
Dim in sight
Feel for relief
Lose of touch
Broken belief
Speed in a rush
Blackened sky
Twisted heart
So young to die
Tearing apart
Breath strained
Flesh twitching
Throat pained
Heart wishing
Love missing
Thought of last
Forgotten past
Can't feel
Won't move
Everything still
Eyes to soothe
Rest has come
Absent existence
It is done
Doom came hence
Empty eyes
Corpse now lame
Say goodbye
But don't cry
Once youthful prime
Poison came
It was my time

CnC is always appreciated.

VaporizorMariJ · 11-26-2008, 07:06 PM

Not bad work, I like it. Pretty suicidal and dark. I hope its not reflecting your true emotions.

11-26-2008, 05:38 PM	#1
nixa New Member Join Date: Mar 2008 Posts: 21 Grams: 1,804.45 Thanks: 0 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Stock Portfolio Total Value: 0.000 Gain/Loss: 0.000%	Poem 'Swift End' I'm pretty awful at writing poetry so sorry in advance @_@; Swift End One, two, only three There's not much more This body can take Swallowed Too late It will sink in quick Death calls Head blurry Stomach sick Knees fall Time slows Thought speeds Pain increased Death in a seed To be deceased No more chances No more light Lost romances Dim in sight Feel for relief Lose of touch Broken belief Speed in a rush Blackened sky Twisted heart So young to die Tearing apart Breath strained Flesh twitching Throat pained Heart wishing Love missing Thought of last Forgotten past Can't feel Won't move Everything still Eyes to soothe Rest has come Absent existence It is done Doom came hence Empty eyes Corpse now lame Say goodbye But don't cry Once youthful prime Poison came It was my time CnC is always appreciated.

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