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Old 06-07-2002, 10:30 PM   #101
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soooooooooo gooooooooooooodd
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Old 06-12-2002, 08:24 PM   #102
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oh thats kinda sad. I feel bad for the poor guy! But there sure is a fine line between a curse and a gift, huh?

Keep writing its awsome!
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Old 06-13-2002, 12:33 AM   #103
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Cleric, your skills keep getting better and better with each sentence. Don't stop.
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Old 06-17-2002, 01:10 AM   #104
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Very impressive, you have a distinct and fun writing style. Keep up the writing, its enjoyable, a nice change from school mandated readings. I origingally thought i just stumbled on this old entry and that the whole story would be here, but unfortunately its not finished! So get writing




Well the picture addition didnt really work like i hoped
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Old 06-20-2002, 10:37 AM   #105
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New chapters are written, update coming later today!

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Old 06-21-2002, 12:57 AM   #106
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A wave of light crashed over the living room floor like a tide coming in covering everything in its path. The bright yellow light from the outside hallway fought through my teary eyes blinding them and making me cup my hand over my forehead like a golfer watching his shot to the fairway.

What I saw when I did that was the man himself standing there arms folded at my doorway with a big smirk on his face. His chest was inflated much like a rooster does when they want to look menacing to the others around them.

When he spoke his voice boomed and it frightened me up off the couch and back against the living room wall. I almost cried out like a scared animal and, would have if not for the intense fear I was facing.

"Now now Mr. Jacobson is that anyway to treat a guest, by not answering the door when they knock?" he had that ever so sarcastic tone.

I wanted to do one of two things. Either run for my life out of the building or just punch this guy in the face. Fear prevented me from doing either, that and his standing in my path to the doorway. With no other options I was stuck.

He started to advance towards me, put his hands on the sides of his belt and spoke again.

"I gave you an oppurtunity to get let off easy, just a minor tobacco chrage but, you ruined it and ran." "Now I am forced to take you in and lay down the law." he appeared to be reaching for something on his belt, probably handcuffs I assumed.

I decided this was going to be my only chance to escape. As soon as he focused on his belt I took the first few steps towards the kitchen, where the was a window that I could have jumped out of. That is if this guy was an idiot, which much to my chagrin he wasnt.

It seemed as if when my feet hit the floor on the second step that they gained this immense weight and just didnt want to move anymore. This feeling crept up my spine and through my whole body making it stiff and rigid. I turned my head slowly with much resistance, just before my whole body went dead i noticed what the cop was reaching for. He had what I saw as a laser light pen that shined on me and was making me feel like I couldnt move a muscle.

"Did you honestly think you can run from me again? The only reason why I let you go before is because I wanted to find out what you were about but, now you cant move, in fact you cant even speak so you are coming with me now, understand?" he voiced it as more of a command then a question, this guy was tough and capable.

He was right though, within moments of my feet feeling heavy the rest of my body became immobile. The unusual thing was it wasnt like I was incapable of moving my limbs, not in the sense of paralysis. It was more like when I told my body to move it just ignored me like an apathetic couch locked stoner, a weird sensation indeed.

The only think I could do was cry as he came forward to remove me from my "real" home. As the tears ran down my cheeks I moved my eyes, the only part of me that could move, around the living room looking at the cop with his giant grin and condemning eyes.

From the light in the hallway I saw another figure walking in on the scene. It wasnt back up like I had originally thought. Coming into my home now was Alex. Now a new dillema. How am I supposed to save him as well as myself? Life just isnt fair sometimes.

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He came up to the open door and stopped, staring into the scene goign on in my appartment.

I tried to yell but, I still had no control over my body except for my eyes. I tried frantically to alert Alex and get him not to come in. I enlarged my eyes which, still had a steady flow of tears coming from them, and as you can imagine he didnt understand. Alls he saw was his friend standing there crying and moving his eyes around like a psycho.

"Guy are you alright ?" he asked me.

I repleied by sobbing more, strangely I mustered the energy to whimper like a scolded puppy.

He advanced further into the room. I shifted my eyes back to the cop who still wore his evil smirk of justice, uncaring of my friend who had arrived and was watching the fiasco.

I heard a familiar voice mumble "noooo" in a brely audible tone. Just then Alex came forward fast with his amrs in front of him. It looked like he was going to shove the cop to get him away from me. I was bittersweet at the thought of him doing that for me.

On one hand it was the ultimate sacrafice between two friends, a true show of respect. On another he was follishly messing with an enemy that had the power to destroy him. how good is a push if a second later you cant even move?

As he was one step away from me I thought to myself that the next moment would seal both of our fates. Alex and I were going to jail if he shoved this cop, that much is certain.

He ran up and just as he was about to make contact I heard the same voice from before say "look out." He came forward and grabbed me by the shoulders. He passed right through the cop!

For a moment the two scenes merged and I thought that Alexs arms were the cops, or they were merging into the same person.

"Guy whats wrong with you are you ok?" he said frantically as he started to shake me gently.

The effect of the shaking was that the already dizzying scene in front of my eyes was now bouncing all over the place. Alls I could do was stare in utter disbelief of what I was seeing. What the hell was going on?

"Guy comeon answer me whats wrong your scaring me, why arent you responding?" he sounded almost as scared as I was and, I wanted to explain to him that I couldnt respond but, if I could explain the situation I wouldnt need to.

He started to shake me harder while shouting my name at full volume as if I didnt hear him or something. The cops image started to break up when he shook me harder, kind of like a hologram that was losing its power and flickering off like a t.v. It faded until just Alex was in front of me, like the cop never was there. I then realised that the voice I heard earlier was actually my own.

Its hard to explain what happened nect. I heard a popping noise much like bubble wrap behind both of my ears, a sort of crackle one would expect from a fire with pine cones in it. its effect was like someone cutting a big string that was holding me in my spot, my body was free to move now.

Its other effect was on my senses, my vision was out of control. It could have been ALexs shaking of me, or what I had just saw but I felt like I was perpetually falling into some dark hole. I literally saw myself from outside my body tumbling down a big black void in time and space, one made just for me.

I could have put my arms out to stop myself from falling, but I didnt care anymore. The only thing I wanted to touch was reality and, you cant grab ahold of that while falling down a black hole.

I gave in and fell until I saw light, I thought I had died. But the light just woke me up slowly, and I had again the world around me, whatever one this was.

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Old 06-21-2002, 01:40 AM   #108
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Im pretty sure this is the dream world.

I awoke in the park area by the lake like before. If you can imagine being woken up by a crane smashing into your room then you have only half of what I experienced when I opened my eyes.

Fleeting images of Alex shaking me plagued my sight. My head felt like it was the game ball from the world cup and my whole body felt hot to the touch. It seems that in a last ditch effort to regain composure my body freaked out. My heart started to beat faster and faster and my breathing was starting to get very erratic. My eyes slowly regulated to the world around me like a child straight from the womb.

I sat up, the lake was void of people and thankfully so. Immediatly I held my head in my hands and started to sob. I didnt want to be here anymore. This world might be a gift but it was starting to mess everything up. How can you live life where one minute something seems so real and the next it dissappears?

My life used to be so normal and plain. I would have killed to have something interesting happen. I used to sit there and predict every detail of my day flawlessly. Nothing was unusual. I woke up, hung out, worked, and went to bed to do it all again the next day. Despite the system being boring it was real. My life was real.

Now though im sitting here sobbing because I cant make heads or tails of whats going on, I have lost control of my life and it scares the **** out of me.

What I saw in my appartment seemed so real. I felt that cops prescence, he was there one minute talkign to me, he even used one of his lil gadgets on me! Now i am left here back in the dream world, I think anyways. Im not even sure how the hell I got here this time. Alex shaking me must have done something.

All the thinking about everything just made me want to cry more, and both of those tasks made my already hurting head start to pound with pain. I didnt even know what day it was, I mean how long has this been going on? The better question should be how long will it go on? Nothing makes sense maybe due to my senses being dulled. My hearing must not be working properly, could I have gone deaf also in this bizarre world?

I stared at the water which made no noise as the waves hit the beach. the birds in the trees opened their mouths but no birdy chirping came out, or if it did I didnt realise it. Another reason to cry I guess. Luckily this ailment didnt last long at all and within a matter of minutes I could hear again.

I went to stand up and almost fell when my feet floated lightly above the ground. I had on a pair of hover shoes. Normally I would be ecstatic but, too bad nothing was normal anymore. In my pockets were the usual items I carried. I had the pack of joints, money, my keys and a lighter. I knew I was messed up because the thought of smoking one of those joints didnt appeal to me. This world is messed up enough without being high.

I floated slowly out over the lake to try and clam myself. I watched my reflection off of the water, this was as close to peace and reality I could get. I laughed at the thought of floating on the water with futuristic hover shoes as being somehow real to me. I got in the middle of the lake and suddenly a wave of fear hit me. If im just imagining all this I could fall in at any moment.

I dont know why but that thought seemed very possible to me at the moment and, I hurried back to the beach area.

"What the hell is going on with you Guy youre cracking up" I said to myself out loud. "Kind of funny to be talking to yourself out loud about how your cracking up." I was definitly losing what little bit of "it" that i had left.

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Old 06-21-2002, 05:25 PM   #109
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i think Guy needs to be rapped up in a straight jacket and put in a padded room

haha just kidding, so far so good man! i can't wait till the end!
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Old 06-22-2002, 12:20 AM   #110
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I've seen this thread floating around for a while, and hadn't had much time to read it. I just read the whole thing now and wow. That's an awesome story. I liked how to realeled the Guy's character and history a little bit at a time. Keep the chapters coming.
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