Leithreas

crack..ouch. hey! good story, bout time you posted it...you had it written when you wrote chapter 4. well its turning out into a good story, hurry up with chapter 6 tomarrow. make sure you proof read it this time! here is a helpful tip. read your story backwords, a lot easier to proof read that way!

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Yeah i will have to try that reading it backwards cause i keep messing stuff up, of course half the time my shorthand is just incomprehensible scribbles but ahh well. Thanks Leithreas *grins*

Cleric

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Wow, great story When you told me that you had a story on creative writing I didnt think I would be that interested in it because i usally dont really care for reading stories but when I started reading it I somehow found myselve drawn too it, its really detailed and well writen, i must say you are a good writer and the story is damn good. I can't wait for the next chapter

The theroy of the whole story kind of reminds me of that old movie "The navagator" where that kid is in the woods and somthing happens and he goes home and his parents arnt there but some other family is and its the future heh... then he ends up riding around a space ship. But i never really liked that movie much and I like your story alot better because its all differnt where its the past and theres no spaceship and there are drugs and what not lol.

Anyways i hope the next part comes soon hehe.

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Hey Th'C.. Just read this for the first time, and I must say, it's nice to have 5 chapters ready to go

I don't usually read too much in the creative writing forum, but this one seemed to be getting bumped a lot and I must say I really enjoyed reading those 5 chapters.

Looking forward to the whole thing... KUTGW

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mindraver

TC, are you writing this as you go i take it? if so, doing a great job so far. how many chapters do you plan on making this novel?

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Faerywings

Very nice job so far. Indeed captivating. So, come on I know you can do it, write the next chapter!!!!
thank you have a nice day =) *FaeRyWings*

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"Alex, my god am I glad to see you!" I had the tone of an over excited school child, given the circumstances though id say I was doing pretty good.

Quickly I recalled the last events and desperate to make sense of it began asking Alex questions.

"Do cops wear all silver? Is this the year 1987? And is pot still looked down upon?" I damn near shook the answers out of him.

"Yes Guy and the cops come equipped with mirror balls, aqua net, and industrial strength bongs." He laughed, I didnt see anything humorous about it at all, I wanted answers, not a mockery of my questions.

I stared at him, I couldnt tell if he was serious or not, I was still very disoriented, my eyes still half closed, my mind a haze like I had just come out of some thick fog. But upon closer examination of my surroundings, he cant be serious, cause im certainly not in a forest.

There I was in the smoke room laying on two big pillows. Alex staring at me giggling while I look around the room nervously. No one else around me. Still how did I get here? Could that all have been one big dream? It was bizarre enough I guess.

"Do you have any clue what you did last night?" he asked me with his eyebrows lowered, narrowing his gaze.

I played along and responded quickly "No, tell me," fearfull of what would next exit his mouth.

"Well you came here and partied it up like normal and im afraid to tell you this, but you owe me 1,500 dollars for my lamp."

Suddenly the foggy haze in my mind lifted and I remembered the evening, ahhh the dancing incident. I made a fool of myself in front of that girl and broke his lamp, trying to break dance. Lovely, I recalled the embarassment I felt, in fact that was what made me walk home in the first place, wait a minute...I walked home.

I started to feel pale and really paranoid again. Alex didnt notice so I tried to speak calmly.

"Yeah i remember the night but I walked home Alex, I can remember walking.." Alex cut me off before I could finish.

"Well actually you started to walk home, but you got to the end of my drive way and came back saying you were dizzy. Then you came in here and crashed on those two pillows and didnt move for about 7 hours, are you aware you smoked $150.00 worth of dank last night?" he smiled ear from ear. "Not that you care but hey thank you man." he began to chuckle and something made me feel much better and I laughed.

His words lifted my spirits. "Then it must have all been a dream" I exhaled deeply, the first time in about 12 hours. I didnt remember coming back into the house, but you know what they say, "marijuana effects the memory," especially a huge amount like that. I giggled and just smiled.

"Do I dare ask" he said smuggly, "Or did someone get with the break dancing chick after all, yeah being a bonehead doesnt count in the dream world does it?" he chuckled at me.

Ahh who would have thought I would miss conversations like this.

"Naw man just had one of the weirdest dreams of my life thats all." I yawned, all that strange brain movement mad me tired. My stomach started to grumble, and Im hungry too!

I stood up and stretched out, I noticed it was a particularly sunny day outside through the window on the west side of the room. "You got work today Alex?"

"Nope today I get to do whatever I want." The official start of the day.

"Well allright then," I said with a smile. Time i guess to do it all over again.

Cleric

Leithreas

wow, not the ending i expected...wait..was that an ending? is there more? if so hurry up and write it! if not, gee golly! i think its swell

TheCleric

Naw thats not the end, im afraid this is only the begining of Guys story, you can expect it to be somewhere between 20 and 30 chapters by the time im done.

And yes i am writing this as i go along, i have ideas, i know the skeleton of the story, and i know the ending allready too mwa haha wouldnt you love to know?

Stay tuned, chapter 7 comes tomorrow.

Cleric