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LittleC

Not forgiven, not forgotten:
The hurt you inflicted went straight to the bottom-
the bottom of my soul
Pulling my heart with it,
when it needed so much to be uplifted.

Not forgiven, not forgotten:
There you sat, on the otherside
Choosing water over blood,
creating the great divide.

Not forgiven, not forgotten:
On you drink from our holy chalice,
indulging in all it's greatness
while taking water from the river of malice,
fueled by sins of satans.

Not forgiven, not forgotten:
I was your crutch when you were crippled
Now I've been hurt
and suddenly for you,
aiding doesn't seem so simple.

Not forgiven, not forgotten:
It has been a new day
And yet you can't remember
the words of hate from yesterday.

Forgiving, forgetting:
Easier for you to do
since you weren't the one
whose heart was shot through.

--the end--

this is just a rough draft - i just wrote it so i know it needs a little work. let me know what you think so far.

thanks,
little c

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Crazy Horse

I liked it. It sounds "deep" to me, which is what I write. Bravo!

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Stewpad

I like the poem's structure, it's nicely balanced and pleasing to the eye. I also like how the repeated line, 'Not Forgiven, Not Forgotten' sets everything in place for the final verse, thereby giving it more impact for the reader. Very powerful, very well-written.

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Proline63

Very nice, I like it. The public demands more!

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LittleC

yea! you guys liked it...that's coo. i'll post some more as soon as these damn exams are over. until next time.

-Little C