Exo-Lithium

-Tetra-

Pull out cha nine'
Sip on some of wine

Cryen all night, cause you lost
Dyin in fright, cause you defrost.

This is green, these aint ho's
This aint yo motha ****in average Joe!

Im the..
CANNABIS ANALYST
HOSTIN THE GANJA EXTRAVAGANZA
IM MR. CONTEMPT, ATTEMPT TO BE.
SPELL IT WITH HEMP TO BE.

ROLL UP THE BLUNT, LIGHT UP THE BONG
THIS IS THE SEQUEL TO CHEECH N CHONG.

Im'a put on a demonstration, for this Bush adminstration.
I' give them the show of their lives.
Create a vaccine for anti-racial rhymes
Some people consider these crimes
I already said that one hundred million times!

I dont get it.
These *****es on the streets pullin them drugs..
Drinken down bottles and bottles of whiskey jugs.
This world is amplified, its indefined.
Please assign to the devine, cause' without it, I'm maligned.

The world is hard to work for
The government be causin' an uproar
I just dont understand this anymore!

Some people call me a slacker..
But instead, why not just call me a pothead?
Im not brain dead, Im not widespread, but Im not def.
If I really wanted to, I could be an italian chef.

I know this one guy, who's wasting his life on nothing.
Not drugs, not nothing. He's almost chinese, he can wage war over Carribean sea's.
But please, you must understand, its nothing of appease.
If you talked to him, you'd have his expertise.
I think that comes from the half-vietnamense.
Can't you see? This is 69 degrees. Its a disease.

Im the..
CANNABIS ANALYST
HOSTIN THE GANJA EXTRAVAGANZA
IM MR. CONTEMPT, ATTEMPT TO BE.
SPELL IT WITH HEMP TO BE.

ROLL UP THE BLUNT, LIGHT UP THE BONG
THIS IS THE SEQUEL TO CHEECH N CHONG.

These dick-heads with weed need to bleed.
Indeed, this is the precede to proceed. Agreed.
This administration will never succeed to recede.
They mislead in what seems to be a concede
Haven't they ever met Walter Reed?

Why don't they ban poppy seeds rather then overfeed.
This is my execution speed to dose. Overdose on what comes most.
I'm diagnosed.

These *****'s in the governement be hatin me for what I got.
Legal this, Eagles that. Bring it, one on one combat. **** that.

SkinnyP

What kind of opinion would you like on this poem and or rap?

Island Bob

eh. i didnt like. i thought it was horrible sorry kid. peace biatch

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highallthetime

nu skool why don't you write your own shyt instead of bashing everyone elses you fukkin puss. don't criticize other people's stuff if you can't even write

Exo-Lithium

K i have no idea when I posted that, I dont even remember when I wrote that. Heres one that I did write.

Im a movie with no sound, Im emptily confound.
Its the other way around, Im talken like, a pound.
Steppin threw this plain, with no attempt to reclaim.
Playen Shadowbane and listening to Mudvayne.
Im talkin green, Im suddenly an automatic cuisine.
Im only mentally obscense, combined with 600 caffeine.
Back to the story, not the one about morning glory.
This marijuana is causin' some nirvana, my eyes look like my pet iguana.
Uhh - I think the size of my pupils just quadrupled!
Before long, Im just smoken my bong, there goes my perception of right and wrong.
Why does it seem, that weed gives a people a sense that misleads in a world that already fails to succeed?
Why must these people neglect, when theres nothing to suspect?

Exo-Lithium

K, heres my new write.

Im a movie with no sound, Im emptily confound.
Its the other way around, Im talken like, a pound.
Steppin threw this plain, with no attempt to reclaim.
Playen Shadowbane and listening to Mudvayne.
Im talkin green, Im suddenly an automatic cuisine.
Im only mentally obscense, combined with 1g caffeine.
Back to the story, not the one about morning glory.
This juana's causin' some nirvana, my eyes look like my pet iguana.
Uhh - I think the size of my pupils just quadrupled!
Before long, Im just smoken my bong, there goes my perception of right and wrong.
Why does it seem, that weed gives a people a sense that misleads in a world that already fails to succeed?
Why must these people neglect, when theres nothing to suspect?
I grow for a living, I give for a giving.
Because of this current Scheduale, Im maken so much money, more money then the easter bunny.
I take advantage of not having to work, or having to work as a hotel desk clerk.
Just because I deal, doesnt mean that I steal
Let alone give the courts the right to appeal.
Take this an example, you think this is unreal.
You take it as surreal and Ima reveal my ideal
These maynes lookin between my hectics
My genetics seem to regime my psychogenetic synthetic euphoria, which is providin' my girl Victoria.
My fate seems delusional, my reality seems confusional.
Can you flo to my rhymes, smoken dro while you high.
What month is this? Is this July? What is 420 divisible by?
Walken down memory lane to refrain upon my self from this white crack cocaine.
I wish this stuff worked like Rogain to sustain my insane domain.

edit - 3rd write.
Im a movie with no sound, Im emptily confound.
Its the other way around, Im talken like, a pound.
Steppin threw this plain, with no attempt to reclaim.
Playen Shadowbane and listening to Mudvayne.
Im talkin green, Im suddenly an automatic cuisine.
Im only mentally obscense, combined with 1g caffeine.
Back to the story, not about morning glory.
This juana's causin' some nirvana, my eyes look like my pet iguana.
Uhh - I think the size of my pupils just quadrupled!
Before long, Im just smoken my bong, there goes my perception of right and wrong.
Why does it seem, that weed gives a people a sense that misleads in a world that already fails to succeed?
Why must these people neglect, when theres nothing to suspect?
Just because I deal, doesnt conclude that I steal
Let alone give the courts the right to appeal.
Take this an example, you think this is unreal.
You take it as surreal and Ima reveal my ideal
These maynes lookin between my hectics
My genetics seem to regime my psychogenetic synthetic euphoria, which is providin' my girl Victoria.
My fate seems delusional, my reality seems confusional.
Can you flo to my rhymes, smoken dro while you high.
What month is this? It this July? What is 420 divisible by?
Walken down memory lane to refrain upon my self from this white crack cocaine.
I wish this stuff worked like Rogain to sustain my insane domain.

SmokerForPeace

One thing I think you could work on is the transition from one line to the next. You seem to jump alot from one topic to another without any transition in between.

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Truckin' in style along the avenue
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Go on home, your mama's calling you

Barker

U too..... i do that all the time