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Old 07-20-2004, 06:45 PM   #1
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Hey guys! This is my first time posting here. I'm taking a poetry class right now, and for it, I wrote this italian sonnet. I got pretty good feedback in the class, so I thought I'd post it here to see what you guys think. I'm actually starting to enjoy writing poetry a lot, so maybe I'll post here more often.

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The unrelenting digits shift and glare
To mock me of the precious loss of sleep
I trade off for the promises I keep.
I seethe in prison, tugging fists of hair.

My rubber soles and brain begin to wear,
as I descend a chasm awfully steep,
its bottom distant, daunting, dark and deep.
All this, without a blink of rest to spare.

Yet, I deserve nobody’s sympathy.
My own indulgence led me to this end.
When work confronted me, I chose to run.
Its angry shrieks had pleaded me to cede;
its nonexistence, I tried to pretend,
but now, I’m toiling underneath its gun.

© 2004 Dan Cardillo
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Old 07-21-2004, 04:41 AM   #2
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That was really good, I thought.

By the way, sorry about your death.
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