Monoxide

I just need someone tonight
Who'll pry me from this fetal pose
And lay with me awhile
As my life's story unfolds

I was so young and so innocent
Never once thought it was wrong
This is the fact that always get's to me
and has haunted me this long

You took advantage of my love
and it's unconditional ways
You made a game of don't tell mom
and naively I obeyed

Well you ****ed me over in more ways than one
As horrish as that sounds
But it doesn't stop just there, no the worse is yet to come

I remember when it became akward
and I started to catch on
This part always chokes me up
and leaves me so withdrawn

You told me just one thing
That always put my mind at ease
And I would let you continue
How ever often that you pleased

You said to be a good boy
and quickly I'd subdue
Because you told me not to worry
For you have had my sister too

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Leithreas

Nicely done. Is there a story behind it? If so, I'd like to hear it. Some of the quatrains confused me.

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Monoxide

No real story behind it, I just got a crazy idea during early morning insomnia and went with it.

beats

Very good poem though.

Well versed. In my opinion.

What confused you leithreas? (i'm curious)

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Leithreas

What confused me? The massive use of pronouns and subconscience hints as to whats going on when I have no clue.

Don't get me wrong, it's a great poem and all, but I'd probably appreatiate more than I already do if I knew the story behind it and what all the pronouns were refering to.

Monoxide, that was a well versed, well written poem and if you dont wish to tell the story to me, that's perfectly fine, it wont change the way I view your work.

imported_brownie

yeah, that poem has real good flow to it.

nice work!
brownie

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