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11-07-2004, 07:38 PM
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|  A freestyled poem... Hey ya'll im **stoned**, and dont write poetry so let me try and see how it fairs for my first time...a lil freestyle poem... A freestyle poem..1 one ever....feedback if enjoyed The world my girl which fits inside My life through strife when i've lied Behold a man who cries and tries 9-5 to survive barely alive Greed to peace with me due east Why teach i too will cease my heartbeat Life is possible but death is certain Money is profitable but comes with burdens Live and breath we all shall prosper A gift indeed our minds will conquer/ |
 
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11-08-2004, 03:48 AM
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|  Just to say Poem's are not my strong point at all. I really don't enjoy them that much because most of the time I can't understand them. I did enjoy ur poem. I have no idea how u created that stoned. I try to do something stoned and it comes out looking like ****. That actually went together and what not peace |
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11-08-2004, 03:56 AM
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| Right on... Right on man i was stoned and in the zone on that, i was in a "thinking frenzy" during that part of my high. CoMpLeX |
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11-09-2004, 12:18 AM
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| nice poem man. i enjoyed the stoned creativity you put into it. the first few lines though i couldnt get to flow right, but i think i was reading it in the wrong rythm. check out some of my poems man. the best way to get ideas for work is from others  don't plagerize though 
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11-09-2004, 03:21 AM
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| yea. it was a good poem. I have no idea how u did that stoned but whateva! 
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11-09-2004, 07:45 AM
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| I appreciate it man... Quote:
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11-09-2004, 08:43 AM
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| Honest opinion, I didn't especially like it. Some words or phrases seem out of place or like they don't belong where they are in the sentence. Whether or not I am misreading the poem or you are using words in a wierd way, it didn't fit together to make much sense. Props for putting it up there though and, as someobody said, don't give up on your dreams! Just remember: If you hang in there long enough, good things can happen. I mean, look at me. </OfficeSpaceQuote>
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11-09-2004, 09:08 PM
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| I thought it was good poem for being stoned, because I know how hard it is to get out the right words just when talking regullarly while stoned. So I give props to you for having the balls to put up this thread. |
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04-29-2005, 11:07 PM
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| Its good to see some talent. this is the first Poem i have opened in this thread I'll defenetly be checking out more now... |
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04-30-2005, 08:09 AM
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| pretty tight poem mate....... |
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