kronic kandie

fade away, as dark words are speaking
hold the thoughts, and mime the actions
ectascy cries, as you fade behind...
my tears disintegrate..

the wind shifted and the clouds rotated
the sun and moon fought upon a field of emptiness
the angels throw stars at the ground...
all around was invisible.
the ocean dried up and soaked into the stairs which lead to this place
i see you standing in the darkness,
a face without the expression.
my mind incinerates..

imported_brownie

i dig it man, can I ask what the meaning is behind it?

I'm getting a sort of sadness, emotional upheavel on your part. Is the title supposed to be ironic? I'd really dig some more backround if you wouldn't mind.

other then that, keep up the nice work!

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kronic kandie

wha's at brownie?! thanks for diggin' my work! appriciate it very much! i'll answer your questions in the best way possible, & even break the poem down for ya! yes, the title "perfect" is ironic, & there's a sad, emotional meaning behind it. it's about mine & my ex-boyfriend's break up. the 1st & 2nd lines are about him talking, & me not listening. 3rd line is sayin' that i'm cryin' as he's walkin' away. 4th line, i'm fallin' apart as i cry. 5th line, we get together & talk, but the tables turn, & (6th line) we fight again. 7th line means that people are sayin' b.s & we blame it on each other. 8th line it's like it's only me & him in the world now. 9th line is sayin' that it seemed like everything was goin' to work out ok, but (10th, 11th & 12th lines) it's like it's to the point that when i looked at him, or we were near each other, that his facial expressions were like we were still in the fight or whatever. you know? it's just one of those times in life, where everything sucks (lol). i hope i answered your question, & i really hope you like my work! i love to write usin' metaphors & objects as people, places, things etc. & i agree, i do get too intense wit my writing, but i like to at some times. anyway, thanks again & keep replyin' back on my work. love hearin' the goods & the bads about it all (lol) happy writing to you too! =) peace out til next time!
kronic kandie