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Old 07-01-2006, 05:34 AM   #1
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Default Skittles, a screen play

I wrote this for an 11 grade english assignment. It takes some interpretation and thought so if you're stoned its probably going to go right over your head
anyway tell me what you think (btw i can't find my final version, this is mostly it but i had edited it a couple more times to make it better)

SKITTLES

ACT ONE, SCENE A

A 17 year old and his father are riding in a Pontiac convertible. The song "Fix You" by Coldplay is playing in the background. They are driving along a road until up ahead the light turns yellow, and the father slows down.

Son: C'mon, you can make it.

Father: A year ago, probably.

The son hesitates, as if to say something and then stops. The car comes to a stop, and the son looks over at his father.

Son: I'm really glad you're back Dad.

Father: Me too Chris.

Son: We all missed you a lot. Mom let Max sleep on her bed so it didn't feel too empty.

The father chuckles.

Father: Yeah she told me. Sometimes I was afraid she was going to choose him over me.

Son: Naw. You're back aren't you? She wouldn't leave someone who could fight like you.

Father: Yeah you're right. I'll never have to struggle like that again.

The light turns green.

CUT TO:

ACT ONE, SCENE B

Two teenagers, about 17 years of age, are in a convenience store. One is pouring a Slurpy while the other is standing next to him. They are laughing and joking around. They are obviously friends.

Teen A: So what did she say?

Teen B: Ryan, she told me to go to hell!

The two kids burst out laughing. Teen B finishes pouring his drink and they both walk over to the register.

Teen B: You aren't getting anything?

Ryan: Ehh, I'm not that hungry.

Ryan eyes the candy below the counter.

Ryan: Actually I'll get some skittles.

Both kids pay for their food and walk out of the store. Ryan opens his bag of skittles, gets an astonished look on his face, dumps out all the skittles and opens the bag so that it is one long wrapper.

Ryan: Oh...my...God...

CUT TO:

ACT ONE, SCENE C

The father and son pull into the parking lot of the convenience store. They enter the store and pass a lottery machine. The father speaks in a defenite, firm voice, with a hint of pain in it.

Son: Hey dad, wanna buy a lottery ticket?

Father: No way.

The son smiles.

Son: You were right.

CUT TO:

ACT ONE, SCENE D

Ryan and his friend are in a Jeep, Ryan in the drivers seat. The song "Dance with the Devil" by Immortal Technique thumps through the stereo of his car. Ryan's friend is very excited about something.

Friend: So dude, what are you going to do with the $50,000?

Ryan: Man I could buy the most bad ass sound system with this. People would hear me coming into school from a mile away.

Both kids laugh, and Ryan looks to the left. When he sees the father and son inside the store, his smile immediately is wiped from his face. He stares at them for about 5 seconds, and then his friend sees them too.

Friend: Oh dude...

Ryan looks forward again, and speaks through gritted teeth.

Ryan: I never liked that kid.

Ryan drops his head down slightly and rests his forehead in his left hand, eyes closed, pondering. Suddenly he looks up again, pauses, and quickly opens his door, as if he were trying to quickly escape his car.

CUT TO:

ACT ONE, SCENE E

The father and son exit the store carrying a bag each. As the father approaches the drivers door, he sees an unfolded wrapper wedged between his seat, with the inside facing up. The son doesn't see it until the father picks it up and inspects it.

Son: What's that?

The father doesn't answer right away. He appears to be in a dreamy state, eyes glazed over. Suddenly the father comes out of the state like he didn't know what was happening. He looks stunned and slightly shaken.

Father: Just...Just some trash

The father puts the wrapper in his pocket. They get in the car and drive off. Without switching camera angles, the camera drops to the curb, where there is a pile of scattered skittles and broken glass.
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Old 07-01-2006, 06:28 PM   #2
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So he gave him the 50,000.
Or maybe he was putting the wrapper in the car to signifie that the kid was gay. *taste the rainbow?*

But either way.
Nice play, I'd like to see it on stage.

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Old 07-01-2006, 07:40 PM   #3
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Your right, it went waaaay over my head
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Old 07-01-2006, 08:01 PM   #4
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I'll give you guys a hit. Scene C gives away the biggest clue to the fathers past. And once you discover the fathers past, you will see why Ryan did what he did.

lol p.s. i just read over my post and saw "hit." it was supposed to be "hint." my bad
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Is his father poor? Did he used to be a gambling addict? I'm no good at figuring this stuff out lol.
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Old 07-02-2006, 08:01 PM   #6
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Aw please tell me man i cant figure out
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Old 07-03-2006, 01:26 AM   #7
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maybe he had a gambling problem that fucked their family up, so he had to go to treatment, and now he's back... but the family is still trying to make ends meet with the nothing the father gambled away...

i dunno.. could be yeah?
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yeah you guys pretty much got it. the father was a gambling addict, and the kid that gives him the 50 grand is hoping it will tear the family apart, because the dad will get sucked back into the gambling world with this 50 grand that nobody knows about.
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he gave up 50 000 just to spite someone?

yeah right ....
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he gave up 50 000 just to spite someone?

yeah right ....
you never know... people in this world are fucked up.
so people in his world could be even more fucked up.
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