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Herbal Meditation · 04-01-2008, 01:43 AM

As one leaves, another arrives
As he builds, so he tears down
As one sun is rising, another sets
And as he creates light, so he creates the darkness

Swim around it to stay away from it all
Travel your path without hitting a wall
Past the rocks
Through the tree-branches
Under the ivy
The fish are trying to eat you
You’re on the same stream as one and all
Going on your path without hitting a wall

One is leaving its shell
While a part of it hangs from a nail

It wondered what was lost, what was found
Cut its losses and touched the ground

A ghost walked out in the fog
Got lost and never found a way home

Herbal Meditation · 04-01-2008, 09:52 PM

any critical comments on my poetry ?

***Feorge Gorman*** · 04-01-2008, 10:03 PM

Well written...and very thought provoking IMO!

Herbal Meditation · 04-01-2008, 10:09 PM

Thank you

. I'm quite happy with the structure/flow of it, turned out better than expected

!

04-01-2008, 01:43 AM	#1
Herbal Meditation Jr. Member Join Date: Mar 2008 Posts: 180 Grams: 1,530.10 Groans: 1 Groaned at 0 Times in 0 Posts Thanks: 101 Thanked 29 Times in 24 Posts Stock Portfolio Total Value: 0.000 Gain/Loss: 0.000%	"One Leaves" by me, Herbal Med As one leaves, another arrives As he builds, so he tears down As one sun is rising, another sets And as he creates light, so he creates the darkness Swim around it to stay away from it all Travel your path without hitting a wall Past the rocks Through the tree-branches Under the ivy The fish are trying to eat you You’re on the same stream as one and all Going on your path without hitting a wall One is leaving its shell While a part of it hangs from a nail It wondered what was lost, what was found Cut its losses and touched the ground A ghost walked out in the fog Got lost and never found a way home

04-01-2008, 10:03 PM	#3
*Feorge Gorman* Asst. Administrator Join Date: Aug 2001 Posts: 1,963 Groans: 2 Groaned at 2 Times in 2 Posts Thanks: 419 Thanked 539 Times in 333 Posts Stock Portfolio Total Value: 0.000 Gain/Loss: 0.000%	Well written...and very thought provoking IMO! __________________ feorge New to Marijuana Dot Com? Be sure to read our POSTING GUIDELINES.

04-01-2008, 10:09 PM	#4
Herbal Meditation Jr. Member Join Date: Mar 2008 Posts: 180 Grams: 1,530.10 Groans: 1 Groaned at 0 Times in 0 Posts Thanks: 101 Thanked 29 Times in 24 Posts Stock Portfolio Total Value: 0.000 Gain/Loss: 0.000%	Thank you. I'm quite happy with the structure/flow of it, turned out better than expected!

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04-01-2008, 09:52 PM	#2
Herbal Meditation Jr. Member Join Date: Mar 2008 Posts: 180 Grams: 1,530.10 Groans: 1 Groaned at 0 Times in 0 Posts Thanks: 101 Thanked 29 Times in 24 Posts Stock Portfolio Total Value: 0.000 Gain/Loss: 0.000%	any critical comments on my poetry ?

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