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Passage

Hey y'all. I'm writing a screen play for a short film my friend is doing. This is my first time doing something like this, but people have told me I have potential in the area. It's a crime/drama loosely based on the style of "No country for old men". Once I have the finalized script for the first few scenes I'll post it up here for you guys, and please don't hesitate to be critical. Anyone here got any experience in doing this or have any tips?

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Write down every single idea you get. This is especially important if you're high, because you will probably get some great ideas that shouldn't be forgotten.

Bhikku

Ditto on this. I'm a novelist and I get some *epic* ideas while baked. But be sure to read them back over when you're straight; sometimes ideas that seem really good to the stoned mind don't make as much sense to the sober, so you might need to do a little bit of tweaking.

The best thing about smoking and creative work is the sheer number of ideas you can come up with to pick and choose at your leisure. I *love* to smoke and write!

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What kind of program are you using to write the script? If you're using a standard word processor, you might want to consider downloading Celtx. It's a freeware program for writing screenplays, stage plays, etc. It literally does everything except write it for you. It looks a little daunting when you first get it running, but it's extremely user-friendly.

Also, set yourself a daily quota of words. I won't let myself go to sleep at night until I've written at the very least 500 words, with my target word count being between 1,000-2,000 a day. It doesn't sound like much, but it really adds up over a week or two.

Good luck!

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Passage

Ok guys I just finished writing a quick scene as just some practice. I've been brain storming with a quick drama comedy skit idea. Two bank robbers who've just pulled off one of the biggest heists in American history decide to celebrate by going to a Japanese restaurant. They get cocky and know if they get draw any suspicion it's all over now. Once situated inside the restaurant, the entire police force of that suburban town walks in, coincidentally it's cops eat for free day. Here's just a little tad of the opening scene.

FADE IN:

EXT. SIDEWALK - AFTERNOON - ESTABLISHING

Cars zip up and down the busy street, all seemingly heading towards a known destination. Traffic sounds fill the air as the never ending commute continues. We see people filing into the buses and trains. Some procrastinatorsarrive just in time, causing the bus to abruptly come to a halt. The screeching sound of metal on metal rings throughout the block. No one has the time to stop and look.

EXT. OPPOSITE SIDEWALK - AFTERNOON

On the opposite side of the street business men are seen walking. They are all wearing similar suits, with no visible expressions on their face. They continue walking emotionless towards whatever destination their dead end job requires them to arrive at this day. There is one exception to this rule. Two men BOBBY CHARLTON and his business associate GARETH GIGS are busy having a laugh, injecting some life into the otherwise mind numbingly plain town.Bobby Charlton is a sharp dressed middle aged man. His short crew cut hairstyle looks as though it was submerged in gel products. His face is of fairly normal appearance, with no striking features. It is made apparent he is trying to hide his ageby the sheer amount of styling products used on his face, creating the opposite effect he was intending. Gareth Gigs is a younger man with a much slender frame than of Bobby Charlton. He is an extremely handsome man, with an aura of charm and charisma around him.

BOBBY CHARLTON

(Laughing)

So, the fuckin idiot walks into the bank right?

GARETH GIGS

Right.

BOBBY CHARLTON

Picture the most suspicious looking motherfucker walking into the bank all shifty eyed and shit. I mean, this guy made as much noise as humanly possible. I'll be damned if there wasn't a fucking person looking at us.

GARETH GIGS

And you just decided to go ahead and rob the place anyway?


Is the formatting alright so far?

 

adam914

Formatting is good, but I can't judge the quality without more dialogue. I'm into screenwriting too and have studied up on it, and what you want is to post some more dialogue. but in general ease up on the descriptions because the people that read the submitted screen plays don't like a lot of descriptions and whatnot mostly because its useless for the film. It all gets changed around anyways when the director messes with it, along with the whole team of people. Dialogue really needs to be the focus of your writing. and don't be afraid if the narrative aspect of the story doesn't sound like edgar allen poe (it doesn't need to). a good thing to check out would be a script website that posts movie scripts, so you can get a feel of how it should look. formatting is pretty open and differs from writer to writer, but it would still be useful for you to check out a site. DIALOGUE DIALOGUE DIALOGUE.

tha son

Least you can really post is 5 pages to really get a good idea of how it's looking.

Way too much description as stated above me. It's not a novel, it's a screenplay lol. But so far the dialogue isn't too on the nose or anything, but 5 pages would be a better example to look at.